Showing posts with label novel excerpt. Show all posts
Showing posts with label novel excerpt. Show all posts

Friday, May 24, 2013

Souldancer Deleted Scene: Forging the White Sword

            The sun was falling below the Edge of the World when a vision appeared to Aber Lico. The blacksmith sat on his doorstep looking east toward town and watched as a strange figure walked out of a heat haze a few hundred yards away.
            More details surfaced as the stranger approached. He wore a black shirt under a ragged tan jacket with matching pants. A mane of shock white hair crowned his head.
            Lico stood and gripped one of the rough porch beams. “I’m closed for the night,” he called out.
            The stranger either didn’t hear or didn’t care. He steadily advanced to stand at the foot of the stairs. His skin was ashen; almost grey, and his eyes were an odd yellow-green.
“I need a forge,” he said in a rigid, unfamiliar accent.
            “I told you,” Lico said. “Shop’s closed.”
            The grey man stared into the house that also held Lico’s workshop. “This is where the blade was Worked,” he said. Then he walked past the blacksmith and into his home.
            “Wait!” Lico shouted over his family’s startled cries. “I make pins and hinges; not swords!” The smith followed his unwelcome visitor through his house to the forge, besieging him with curses.
With his wife and children huddled in the doorway, Lico seized a stout hammer and approached the man who’d invaded his home.
            “I don’t know where you’re from,” the blacksmith said, “but you’d best return there.”
            Ignoring his unwilling host, the stranger set about stoking the coals.
            “Stop him, Aber,” urged the blacksmith’s wife. “He’s like to burn the house down!”
            Gritting his teeth, Lico hefted the hammer and brought it down upon the stranger’s back. He felt the impact running up the shaft and heard a sickening crunch. The intruder fell to his knees but started crawling toward the forge.
            The smith swung again with far less reluctance. The blow knocked the stranger flat, but he dragged himself along the plank floor.
            Lico brought the hammer up again and let it fall with a savage cry. He swung again and again, only stopping when the broken and bloody form on his floor lay still.
            The considered informing the city guard. Instead he dragged the body to the Edge of the World and cast it over the smoking precipice.
 
            It was pitch black when Lico woke, panting and soaked with sweat, to the sound of ringing metal.
He started when his wife grabbed his arm.
“What is that?” she whispered.
            “It’s coming from the shop,” the blacksmith said. The rhythmic sound of metal striking metal continued for several moments before Lico found the courage to rise from bed. Lighting a lamp, he crept toward the workshop.
            The orange-red light of live coals bent and magnified ordinary objects into hellish shadows. A lone figure stood at the forge. His right hand rose and fell in a familiar motion that turned Lico’s stomach. The small silversmith’s hammer sounded clear, chiming notes.
            “What are you doing?” asked the smith, his voice trembling. “Who are you?”
            The delicate hammer rang once more and stopped. The figure turned, revealing a bloody ruin of a face, and gazed at Lico with one yellow-green eye.
            The blacksmith ran to his children and found that his screams had already woken them. Hastily loading his family into their wagon, he raced through the night toward Highwater.
 
            When Lico returned after dawn with the city guard, the stranger was gone. All that remained to mark his presence were a few lumps of slag. Boasting a mirrored sheen, the impossibly light metal cast purple reflections in its white surface.

Wednesday, May 8, 2013

Nethereal Update

It's been a while since I could report movement on the Nethereal project. All the while I've been busy doing my homework and sending out query letters to those literary agents whom I deem best able to represent the book.

All of my queries were met with form rejections or silence (except for one which offered some encouragement). This pattern of responses isn't unusual. Most folks in the publishing industry are so swamped that they don't have time for individualized feedback.

The pattern of rejection was interrupted yesterday when I got a request for sample pages of my manuscript. The agent asking for a look at my material was the first to receive a query letter I'd drafted using a new approach. Correlation isn't necessarily causality, but it's quite a coincidence. I'm inclined to think that my previous query letters didn't sufficiently entice agents to read the manuscript, but that's how we learn.

I'll keep you updated as new information becomes available.

And if the aforesaid agent pops in, thank you for giving me a chance. Thanks also to anyone who's read my work, even if you couldn't make it past page one.

Thursday, April 18, 2013

Souldancer Apocrypha: Out of the Flames

Sorry for the lateness of this post. My internet was down most of yesterday. In reparation I offer a side story exclusive to this blog.

            “Is he coming?”

            Sheb’s question evoked a sharp hiss from Quor.

            “I’m sorry,” the younger boy said.

            Reducing his two-handed grip on the upper branch to one, Quor turned to frown at Sheb. “Be less sorry and more quiet,” his elder brother whispered. He ain’t never coming if you scare him off!”

            Hanging his head, the younger boy clutched tighter to the bulbous oilcloth bundle he held.

            “Don’t pout,” Quor said with a note of regret. “I’m just the lookout. You have the best job.”

            Sheb looked past his arboreal perch to the trail far below. The dirt path was remarkably clear for how seldom the villagers used it.

            The younger boy returned his attention to his brother. Quor had resumed his post, scanning the woods in the direction of Vale. His sandy hair caught the red-orange light of sunset that filtered through the canopy. A gust of wind shook the leaves. Though not quite cold, it already lacked summer’s heat.

            Sheb’s focus snapped back to the present moment when he saw Quor’s body tense. “Someone’s coming,” the elder boy said.

            Well trained in what was required of him, Sheb braced himself against the tree trunk and held the bundle over the path. His heart pounded in expectation of a white-robed figure meandering along the trail.

            Minutes passed, and no one appeared. The bag weighed no more than five pounds, but the effort of suspending it over empty space started to take its toll on the boy’s arms. The bundle’s contents shifted as his hands began to shake.

            “Hold steady!” Quor hissed.

            Something flew up and bit the back of Sheb’s leg. Abandoning stealth, the younger boy screamed and pitched forward. He clutched desperately for support as the bag plummeted, painting the trail in a spatter of rotten blackberries. His grasping hands found Quor’s shirt. The effort gained only a moment’s reprieve before both boys toppled from their boughs to land in bushes defiled by fermented pulp.

            “Look what you’ve done!” Quor raged as he struggled to free himself from sticky, pungent shrubbery and his brother’s gangly limbs.

            “I’m sorry,” Sheb wailed. “Something bit me!”

            “The sting of a cast stone is better than you deserve,” a husky voice declared.

            “Who’s there?” Quor asked, his voice trembling.

            “It’s highwaymen,” Sheb yelled. “They’ll slit our throats and dump us in the brush!”

            “You’re already in the brush,” the stranger said. “Stop squirming unless you want to stay there.”

            A heavy, callused hand grabbed Sheb’s arm and yanked him free of the sticky shrub. A moment later he stood beside Quor, covered in musky syrup and leaves. Sheb knew the man towering over them was no highwayman. The children of Vale were warned that troublemakers would be exiled to the deep dark woods with old Janto. Now here he stood in his ragged clothes; his stern eyes framed by a wild wreath of hair and beard.

            “Do you know the trouble you nearly caused?” Janto asked at length.

            “We was just out berry-picking,” Sheb lied.

            “You should learn to tell ripe fruit from rotten,” Janto said. “But I know what you were doing here.”

            Quor suddenly broke his silence. “Please don’t make us live in the woods!” he cried. “We’re sorry. Just let us go home!”

            Janto raised a shaggy eyebrow at the elder boy. “I have troubles enough without a pair of delinquents to look after,” he said, and Sheb’s heart leapt.

            “But neither can I let you return home,” the hermit added.

            The brothers exchanged desolate looks. To their surprise, Janto turned and started down the trail.

            “Come,” he barked. “I know a stream nearby. You can go back to your mother when we’ve improved your smell.”

 

            Almost an hour later, Sheb sat beside Quor on a mossy stone; the hermit’s musty cloak enveloping both of them. Their wet clothes hung from low branches nearby. Janto seated himself on the bed of needles beneath a dying pine. Sheb felt his brother shivering beneath the cloak, and he noticed that the coming night had lent a slight chill to the once balmy air.

            “Pardon me sir,” the younger boy said. “It’s nearly dark. Won’t you light a fire?”

            Janto brooded, stirring the brown needles before him with a twig. At last he said, “No fire tonight. Not with the Journey underway.”

            “He came, then?” Quor asked through chattering teeth. “We was up in that tree since noon and didn’t see nobody.”

            “But you were seen,” the hermit said. “A blind man could have. I met the sojourner and set him on a safer path.”

            “You turned him away?” Quor groaned. “Why’d you let us spend all day up that damned tree?”

            Janto’s silence made the stone seem raucous. After a moment he said, “Nothing must hinder the Journey. If I’ve taught you nothing else today, I pray that seed alone takes root.”

            Sheb leaned closer, causing Quor to jockey for his share of the cloak. “We wasn’t gonna hurt Jemai,” he said. “We just wanted a bit of fun with him.”

            The hermit’s deep brown eyes fixed themselves on the boy so suddenly that Sheb nearly toppled from his seat. Pain and loss were graven on that weathered face, along with a kind of fervor bordering on fear. Then, just as suddenly, he looked away.

            “Neither of you knew the time before the Journey,” Janto said. “That is a blessing. It was not a time of pleasant memory. Years before you swelled your mother’s belly, a handful of us gathered in the Vale. We came from all the corners of the world looking for rest and relief. What we found was hunger and hardship.

            The hermit paused. Taking up his stick again, he resumed scratching in the pine-scented dirt. “I had a younger brother not much more than your age,” he told Quor. “God never game him the natural fear of foolishness that helps most folks survive. He got tired of being hungry and set out east: the first to leave of us who’d come.

            Sheb felt Quor shifting beside him. Now both of them sat on the rock’s edge.

            “The old folks figured he’d come home when he got tired. There was talk of a search when the first day passed, but no one ever went. Finally folk just stopped talking of him—even our mother.”

            “Did he ever come back?” asked Sheb. The shame of his sudden intrusion warmed his face.

            “Aye,” Janto said. “It was me who found him. I shared the others’ fear of the outside, but it was my brother who’d gone missing. So I took to walking the woods; never going much farther than we’re sitting right now.

            “One day at sundown I rounded a bend and there he was: stumbling out of the bush near the fork in the stream. I waded right across to him and was about to embrace him till I saw what had become of his face.”

            The storyteller paused. Sheb held back the question on his lips, but just barely.

            “What happened to him?” Quor asked instead.

            Janto was a moment longer answering. “I almost thought it a trick of the failing light,” the hermit said, pressing the twig into the ground point first. “But I got close enough to make no mistake, and the sight banished all doubt that what folk said about the Great Fire was true. My brother was burnt: not by the sun or even by open flame. There wasn’t a mark on him besides the palm print branded into his face.”

            Quor’s eyes widened. “Demons,” he whispered.

            “Perhaps,” Janto said. “But demons in stories have claws or hooves. I never heard of one with hands dainty as a young maid’s.”

            Sheb’s breath caught in his throat. The night’s chill returned in force.

            “I don’t know how he made it back,” the hermit went on. “The burn had already festered. One of his eyes was a weeping boil, and the other was nearly sealed shut. He was starved and exposed, but somehow he’d found his way. I helped him back to the Vale where he died in the night.”

            This time Sheb needed no help keeping silent. There were no words.

            “The next spring was the first time there was more green than grey,” Janto said. “The Journey’s been made every year since, and it’s never left us wanting.”

            “I’m sorry for your brother,” said Quor.

The hermit grinned, perhaps with pride. “Horth was the first to seek the Fire beyond the mountains. He’s still the only one who’s come back. If it teaches you why we send one soul each year to ransom many, and why we light no fires at summer’s end; then his tale’s worth the telling.”

 

            Sheb didn’t remember falling asleep when he awoke next to Quor early the next morning. The hermit was gone; leaving his cloak and the boys’ dried and folded clothing.

            The walk back to Vale passed in silence. Emotions warred inside his heart: pity for old Janto, gratitude for the blessings gained by his long-dead brother, and shame for nearly desecrating his rite.

            One question kept nagging him, though.

            “Quor,” he finally asked, “why do they send simpletons like Jemai if the Journey’s so important?”

            “It’s an honor, Sheb,” the elder boy said at last. “The only one his kind can hope to get.”